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Only A Dream

Laterna

Dream-Weaver
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  • Hesshow peoples ^^

    Welcome to my first fic here on PC, I hope it's good enough for ya'll ^^

    Ratings-wise, I'd give it PG-13 for now as I'm told it is quite dark and the language, violence and such will become a dittle bit stronger as it progresses (obviously, the appropriate warnings will be provided before chapters with that).

    Anyways, I'll just get on with it and ya'll can tell me what ya'll think *cookies*

    CHAPTER ONE ~ 2:32


    Under a tree, I find myself... I'm walking slowly through dense golden foliage... it is Autumn, but it is not for that reason that the trees are golden... it is the fires... the fires of war... it has taken everything... my friends... my family... myself..."you do not belong"... an angry masculine voice speaks... this beautiful world is falling apart before my very eyes and I am powerless to stop it... "you are the cause"... that deep masculine voice echoes in my head... it causes the earth to shudder, the earth begins to crumble beneath my feet and a new being is born... Arceus...

    I gasp for breath as I sit up sharply, clutching my chest, wanting to rip out the pain I feel inside. I feel weak and sick, like I have a fever although I know I suffer from no such affliction.

    "It was only a dream, it was only a dream," I tell myself, rocking back and forth.

    However, I know it was so much more than "only a dream"... this nightmare has plagued my existence every night for almost three weeks now. I know that if I turn around to face the blinking green numbers of the clock by my bed, I know that it will say 2:32 because it always does. Regardless, I turn around anyway, hoping against all hope that it doesn't... but it does... it always does.

    I look around my room: always seeing a shadow on the light blue walls out the corner of my eye, thinking I see a shape crawling across my rose-patterned bed-sheets, a nose tapping at the double-glazed window opposite the bed, someone rustling behind the green curtains... but I know it is just my imagination, it's all in my head and yet I can't shake the images and go back to sleep.

    One can't help but cry in this situation and so I breakdown as I have done every time this has happened. I smother my face with my hands so that my mother and daughters won't hear me and come through and worry. They know not of this dream, but only because it is "only a dream"...

    Suddenly it is morning, the pure light of the sun has transformed every inch of my room, turning it from the hellish nightmare world of 2:32 to my oceanic sanctuary. I feel safe again, even though I am lying propped up against the headboard, my neck and back are aching. But, this is nothing, this has become a part of my daily routine.

    I sit up and stretch out my limbs, kicking off the covers and setting my feet down on the fluffy pale green carpet. It feels so soft as my toes snuggle into it.. it is so soft, so warm, inviting... my eyes close and I fall to the floor, the thud of my body against the hard floorboards underneath the carpet fully waking me up.

    There is a knock on the door.

    I am startled as I hazily get to my feet. I am unsure of how to react and what to do as I do not remember anything of my life for a second and it all comes flooding back, overwhelming me and locking me in this moment... but it is only for a moment...

    "Yes?" I respond to the knock groggily.

    An aging voice of my mother calls through, "are you alright in there dear?"

    "Yes mom," I speak to her through the door as I am afraid to face her.

    I listen carefully as my mother wanders down the stairs, breathing out a heavy sigh of relief.

    I feel the strong urge to leave, to take myself out of my life, out of everyone's life... I feel I should not exist. I look at the faded blue door - it is the only thing that keeps everything in, it keeps me locked away in my own world. But, even so, I scan back across the rest of my room, recalling the shadows that terrorised me during the night. I feel this place no longer is mine, my life is not my own any more.

    The faces of my twin daughters suddenly pops into my head - Twila, who is older by about five minutes, and Skya, who is arguably more mature. I close my eyes and study their faces and remember their lives - going to the newly built Trainer's School by run by Lucas, having to drop out upon reaching the age of ten, not being able to start their journey due my mother's health problems... the past few years have been so hard on them, so difficult. They have showed so much strength and courage.

    "No," I say to myself as I tightly grip the door handle.

    I have to stay here, I have to stay strong... for my girls. I take in a huge gulp of air, hold it and slowly exhale and then repeat this deep breathing motion a few more times, clearing my head, pulling myself together.

    "It was only a dream," I tell myself as I do every morning before heading downstairs.

    Opening my bedroom door has never been, nor will it ever be, the hardest part of my day, nor will going down the cream-coloured hall and the stairs, turning left at the bottom and heading into my bright yellow kitchen slash dining-room. No, all of this, while each step hurts, it is easy. The hard part comes next...

    I enter the kitchen slash dining-room and let the warm glow of the yellow walls and the heat of my mother cooking breakfast welcome me into my life again. I stare for a few moments at my daughters, sitting on either end of the dining table eating toast.

    "Good morning," I say to the room.

    "Good morning mom," Twila smiles, noticing me, and gets out of her seat to hug me.

    I wrap my arms around her and stare blankly at the have-eaten toast sitting on the table... she abandoned it for me, she abandoned food, life... for me... am I really that important? I pull away from her and shake my head, running my fingers through my short Prussian blue hair, which I inherited from my mother and passed on to my daughters.

    "Are you alright?" Twila stares at me, her face filled with concern.

    Skya and my mother also approach, their faces filled with an equal worry.

    "Yes," I smile and laugh, looking round at all of them. "Yes, yes, I'm fine, no need to worry."

    They all smirk, my mother and daughters, and say together, "that's when we worry the most!"

    I embrace my daughters and kiss them both on their heads.

    "You'd better eat up fast," mother points to the tea-cup-shaped clock hanging next to the back window, just behind the dining table, "or else you'll be late for work."

    My daughters hurriedly finish their breakfast and their coffees and run off through the backdoor, situated behind where Twila was sitting. I feel the need to make a mental note of their appearance: Twila is dressed in a regular old jeans and shirt, with a skirt like cloth wrapped around her waist, while Skya is wearing a lovely dark dress-suit, her hair all neatly tied up on her head and her glasses glimmering in the light.

    I kiss them both goodbye and watch as one runs off to the Trainer's School while the other walks.

    "Something is bothering you," my mother speaks from behind me.

    I spin around and gaze at her as she washes up some of the dishes. She is standing in plain clothes, hunched over the silver sink, the warm water flowing over her hands, washing everything away, like it never existed...

    "No, it's..." I pause.

    My mother turns around, giving me her full attention. Her face tells me that she doesn't buy it, I can see in her eyes that she knows I have lied, the way she purses her lips tells me that she wants to speak but dares not to for fear of upsetting me.

    "It's nothing, I just need to make some calls," I stare blankly at the hallway at the bottom of the stairs. "Will you be alright by yourself for a little while?"

    She comes closer, placing an aged hand on my shoulder, her tired eyes tell me her real feelings while her lips spew lies, "I'm fine, don't let me be a burden, go on."

    I smile and nod and walk back through the kitchen, snapping up the last slice of toast on one of the counters. A trail of crumbs follow me as I wander on through the hall, past the front door and into my wine-coloured living room. Immediately to my left is a black leather sofa, sitting just under a window that looks out on the front lawn. The dark colours call to me, their lifeless essence seemingly pulling me in closer...

    "Shake it off, shake it off," I tell myself and look towards the video-phone at the back end of the room.

    I go towards, pick up the green receiver, dial a number and stare intently at the green-rimmed screen, willing it to switch on and display my friend's comforting face.

    "Hello?" the soft voice of my fellow Co-ordinator is heard before her picture appears.

    She has not changed in ten years, her brown hair remains parted at either side under a green bandanna, her shirt a contrasting rosy red.

    "Hello May," tears fill my eyes.

    "Dawn?" she asks. "Wow, it's been a while, how are you?"

    "I'm fine," I smile at her warm face, her blue eyes filled with compassion as well as passion. "And you?" I return the gesture out of politeness.

    "Yeah, I'm doing good," she laughs nervously. "My son just got back from Kanto so things are pretty busy around here."

    "Is he still stuck between Contests, Gym Battles and general research?" I make a point of taking an interest in her life before unloading my problems.

    "Well, he's struck out research, says he doesn't wanna be like his father..." she pauses.

    "What?" I grow concerned. "What is it?"

    "I think... I think he's leaning more to Gym Battles, probably my fault for telling him all those stories about Ash when he was growing up, you know?" my friend responds, her voice a little saddened at the thought of her son not following in her footsteps.

    The image of Ash, our dear friend, crosses my mind, "have you heard anything?"

    "No... not since..." she chokes up, she begins to sob. "God, I'm sorry..."

    "It's alright..." I gaze upon her distraught face and decide not to burden her with my issues at this time. "I'm sorry to have upset you, I'd better go just now..."

    "Okay..." May wipes her tears on her white-gloved hand. "Thanks for calling," she forces a smile, but her voice is still trembling.

    "Bye," I say awkwardly, unsure of how to appropriately end the conversation.

    "Bye," May repeats with my same tone.

    The phone then clicks off as she hangs up. We become disconnected from each other. I hang up my receiver to reset it and then pick it back up, dial a new number and wait anxiously for the voice and the face of another friend.

    "Hello? Hello?" the gruff, manly voice of Brock sounds through and his face soon appeared on my screen.

    "Hello old friend," the smile on my face this time is not forced, I feel happy to see someone I was so close too.

    His hair is longer than when I last saw him, coming down around his neck. His eyes and face remain so strong looking, so confident. I know this man and he knows me...

    "Dawn," he says my name in that voice and my head is flooded with memories.

    I cry as it all hits me - everything that has happened since I met this man, all the pain, all the problems, all of my life... and that day, the day he disappeared and left her all alone... the day all our lives ended and we became the people we are today.

    "Hey, hey, hey," he says softly. "Come on, sweetie, tell me what's wrong."

    "Brock," I choke out, "I don' t know what to do... I fear that something bad is going to happening, that something bad is happening!"

    "Hey," he leans closer to the screen. "Do you want me to come over?"

    "No," the feeling in my heart lightens. "Don't be ridiculous, you live so far away."

    "Just say the word and I'll be there, I'll find a way..." his voice is shaken.

    "No," I repeat, "I'm okay... just had myself a moment there is all... stress and stuff..."

    I didn't want him to come, it would be too hard... I couldn't... not after all this time.

    "I'm sorry to have bothered you," I bow my head and hang up.

    Taking in deep breaths, in and out, in and out, I regroup and stand up. I turn around and find myself sitting on the black leathery couch. I hear a bang.

    "What?" I sit up sharply.

    "You okay mom?" the voice belongs to my daughter, Twila, but why is she home so early?

    "Ah, good, you're home," my own mother speaks.

    I cannot see them, everything is black and fuzzy.

    "I found her about an hour ago," my mother was speaking to my eldest daughter.

    "Tell me exactly what happened," Twila demands, her voice strong yet shaky.

    "Well, shortly after you and your sister went off to work, your mother said she was going to make a few phone calls," my mother explains, I can tell she is looking at me by the volume of her voice. "I gave her some privacy, finished the dishes, did some of the back garden and, before I knew it, it was lunch-time and she was just sitting there, staring into space."

    I feel my daughter kneel down in front of me, the creak of the floorboards, the scrunching sound of her jeans, her presence just before me.

    "Mom?" she asks.

    "Yes?" I turn to face the direction of her voice.

    "What happened?" I can hear the worry in her voice.

    "I don't..." I put a hand to my head, I can't tell which one though. "I don't remember."

    "Okay," my daughter gets to her feet, her clothes rustling as she does. "Grandma, would you mind calling the doctor?"

    "Right away," I hear my mother run through into the kitchen, her slippered feet pounding rather heavily on the laminate floor.

    My daughter leans down before me again, wrapping her arms around me and whispering, "no need to worry mom."

    I know something is deeply wrong now, nothing can hide that fact from me.

    "That's when I worry the most..." I begin to cry and shake.

    "Doctor's on his way," my mother speaks as she re-enters the room. "Should be here any minute."

    My daughter pulls away and I am left not knowing if I am alone or not. I feel they would not leave me, but unless they make noise or something I cannot tell if they are here or not. There is a flash and I see the stars fall for a brief second and then I am back in the fuzzy appearance of my home.

    "Good," Twila sighs, relieved that this may all be sorted soon.

    My breathing grows heavier, each breath is harder to take than the last. I feel as though I am being ripped from this place - images of another world keep flashing across my eyes, replacing the blurry vision of the living-room to a twisted world of falling stars and purple mutated trees. My head is spinning.

    "Good," Twila sighs, the exact same way as before.

    I look around frantically even though I cannot see.

    "What?" I gasped.

    "It's alright, Dawn," a man's voice speaks, more-than-likely the doctor who was called. "Just relax," he says as he injects me with a needle.

    The then piece of metal punctures my skin... it is painful, but I do not mind.

    "No need to... to wor... ry..." I moan as I am plunged into darkness...

    Under a tree, I find myself... I'm walking slowly through dense golden foliage... it is Autumn, but it is not for that reason that the trees are golden... it is the fires... the fires of war... it has taken everything... my friends... my family... myself..."you do not belong"... an angry masculine voice speaks... this beautiful world is falling apart before my very eyes and I am powerless to stop it... "you are the cause"... that deep masculine voice echoes in my head... it causes the earth to shudder, the earth begins to crumble beneath my feet and a new being is born... Arceus...

    My body suddenly snaps into an upright position, I claw at my chest because something inside is not right, something inside me is wrong. I feel like I cannot breathe and my body is drenched with sweat, like I have a fever, but I know that is not the case for I have been here before.

    "It was only a dream, it was only a dream," I tell myself, rocking back and forth.

    However, I know it was so much more than "only a dream"... this nightmare has plagued not changed since the last time I experienced it. I know that if I turn around to face the blinking green numbers of the clock by my bed, I know that it will say 2:23 because it always does. Regardless, I turn around anyway, hoping against all hope that it doesn't... but it does... it always does...

    I look around my room: always seeing a shadow on the light blue walls out the corner of my eye, thinking I see a shape crawling across my rose-patterned bed-sheets, a nose tapping at the double-glazed window opposite the bed, someone rustling behind the green curtains... but I know it is just my imagine, it's all in my head and yet I can't shake the images and go back to sleep.

    Nothing has changed... I carry on within my own personal nightmare...

    ~~~END OF CHAPTER ONE~~~

    Thankies to all who readed it *cookies* any comments and questions are more than welcome and highly appreciated ^^
     

    ArtekOublier

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  • I just want to say how much I love this story. Well done also on doin it in 1st person, not many people can pull that off properly. !st and 2nd person narrative always give off that personal feel to stories and this one definetly has it when I read it.

    I also have some question hunni ^^ What were your reasons behind making the voice of Arceus male?
    What age is Dawn now and where did the idea for her daughters' names come from?
    And does her mum still have that silly Glameow> lol

    Anyway I look forward to hearing more bibi ^^ talk to you soon
    xxx
     

    An-chan

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  • Uh-huh, very spooky indeed. I wonder what's wrong with poor Dawn?

    You write very well and this is very interesting. I'm looking forward to getting to know what's going on! I'll keep an eye on this one for sure... And, um, where are you from? Is English your native language or are you like me, who writes with a foreign language?
     

    Laterna

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  • Thank you both for your comments ^^ *cookies all round*

    I primarily wrote this chapter in 1st person in order to gain that personal feel, I wanted readers to really feel like they knew Dawn and were pulled right in to her life and experience every moment with her and follow her journey here and I'm glad that came across ^^

    Arceus was made male as he believes that the masculine voice carries more dominance and power, particularly over a woman such as Dawn... basically, it leads him to think he has a lot more power and such, you know?

    Dawn is around late 30s early 40s ish. The name Twila comes from the word "twilight", the time between night and day, and Skya's name comes from "sky", where one sees the effects of dawn and twilight ^^

    Glameow, sadly, was hit by a bus... hohoho, it's dead *ghost cookies* santa's plan XD nah, it's still hanging about ^^

    I'm glad you found this interesting and it is really spooky (re-reading it I just couldn't help but say "OMG"), I'm really happy you liked it ^^

    English is my first language (I live in Scotland), but I have dabbled in various other languages including French, Spanish, German, Slovakian and possibly soon to be Korean ^^

    The next installament will be posted either tomorrow or Thursday and I hope to see you both then ^^

    Thank you both again for your lovely comments, it's really inspiring *inspirational cookies*
     
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    To deter any more one-line reviews like that one *points neon sign to it to draw massive amounts of attention to Pinhead, who did it wrong* there shall be no more one-line reviews. Christ, people, read the stickies.

    Nothing to see here, Laterna.
     

    Laterna

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  • The wait is over ^^

    Thank you all for your kind comments, I hope this chapter is as well-received. Enjoy *cookies for the show*

    Chapter 02 ~ Ladder Of Angels

    I begin to cry again, it cannot be helped as it could never have been helped every night for all these weeks. I want to die, but I cannot think such things for the sake of my family for they need me. Without my family... I am nothing. I sit up, in my room, at 2:32 and I watch the shadows dance and the noise of the outside world, the winds and the branches and the howls of Pokémon, as they try to terrify...

    "No longer," I whisper to myself, squeezing my eyes shut. "Never... again..."

    I open my eyes and the clock continues to blink in its vile green numbers 2:32 and the shadows stretch up as if to attack and the noise of the winds and the branches become otherworldly moans and a rat-tat-tap as something tries to enter...

    "No," I close my eyes as tight as I can and scream "No longer!"

    Everything stops.

    There is a knock at the door.

    Silence.

    Another knock and yet more silence.

    Then a quivering voice, "mommy?"

    I snap back to reality - my body straightens up, my eyes open wide and my senses return to their usual frame. I am brought back to myself, I am "me" again.

    I gently lift up the covers, the rose pattern creasing and crinkling gentle as though they are blowing in a calming breeze; my feet land softly on the cushiony pale green fluffy carpet and I feel the cosy warmth creep up my toes, right up through my entire body, warming my heart once more. I stand up right and run my hands through my silky prussian blue hair before reaching out for enriching golden door handle and twist and pull and I see my daughter's cute, tired face staring into me.

    Everything goes black...

    Under a tree, I find myself... I'm walking slowly through dense golden foliage... it is Autumn, but it is not for that reason that the trees are golden... it is the fires... the fires of war... it has taken everything... my friends... my family... myself..."you do not belong"... an angry masculine voice speaks... this beautiful world is falling apart before my very eyes and I am powerless to stop it... "you are the cause"... that deep masculine voice echoes in my head... it causes the earth to shudder, the earth begins to crumble beneath my feet and a new being is born... Arceus...

    I bolt upright in my bed, sweat trickling down my limbs, soaking the bed sheets. The room is clammy and I cannot breathe. I have a pain in my chest, in my heart... something is wrong within me and I must rip it out. I claw at my chest, my nails scratching my skin, my fingers slide off my body as the sweat pours from my pores... I feel sick, like I have been suffering from some sort of disease but I know, I know that I suffer not.

    I turn to face the clock and I scream, pulling my hair as it blinks 2:32.

    "Why?" I moan. "Why? Why? Why? Why? WHY?!"

    I shriek into the night, howling as my world, my life collapses around me.

    Silence.

    I look around at the room. I stare into the faces of the crawling shadows that sprawl across my light blue walls, I kick at the strange shapes I see creeping over my rose-patterned covers, a scream at the noises I hear just outside me window. However, my cries sound hollow and I fear that my life is actually coming to its end here and now. These nights are so long and the nightmares far longer.

    "Help me," I sob and I shake. "Please, God, help me..."

    Darkness...

    Under a tree, I find myself... I'm walking slowly through dense golden foliage... it is Autumn, but it is not for that reason that the trees are golden... it is the sun... that golden son of light... it has warms everything... my friends... my family... myself..."you will save the world"... a gentle feminine voice speaks... this beautiful world is coming together before my very eyes and I can't help but smile and cry... "you are the cause"... that soft feminine voice echoes in my head... it causes the earth to glow, the flowers begins to grow beneath my feet and a new being is prevented from rising...

    My eyes open sharply. I am lying in my bed and my room is filled with the light of the sun. I gasp as I sit up, the rosy duvet crumpling around me. I spin around sharply, seeing a blur of blues and greens, to see my clock - 8:47.

    "What?" I gawk at it groggily.

    I feel... good...? It's strange, I know I slept really well with that lovely dream and all and everything seems to have gone back to normal, the way it was before all these weird nightmares began. I feel I should not trust this scenario, yet I cannot help but be astounded by the radiance and warmth I can see and feel around me.

    The room is bright, the beautiful sunlight filling every inch of this, my sanctuary. I feel completely and truly at peace for the first time in a long while. I rotate in my bed and lift my feet out onto the soft fuzzy carpet. It nuzzles into my feet and I walk across it towards the door that separates me from the outside. I grip the door handle and something happens...

    "Who am I?" I gasp and back away from the large hard shape before me.

    I spin around this... place I find myself.

    I stare with wide eyes at the pale walls and the harsh light that floods this place.

    "What is this place?" my breathing grows more panicked. "How did I get here?"

    Then it all comes flooding back - the crashing waves of memory, the flooding of emotions and I drown in the moment. So many images of me growing up without a father, starting my journey, meeting that boy, growing up, winning my way through the world, having my daughters, having them grow up with their father and I separated, having those nightmares, finally waking up in this place just moments ago.My eyes are wide, like they're popping out of my head and I cannot even begin to think of what I am going to do next.

    "What is wrong with me?" I moan and press my forehead against the solid cold door. "Won't this ever stop?" I begin to sob.

    No, I think, it won't stop... it will never, but that does not matter because in know in my heart of hearts my daughters, my mother, my family... they need me. They need me. I take in a huge gulp of air, hold it and slowly exhale and then repeat this deep breathing motion a few more times, clearing my head, pulling myself together, just as I've done every other day this has happened. Then I open the door and I gaze out upon the cream-coloured hallway. This is it. I accept once more that this is my life and I suck it up and get on with it for I have no other option.

    I make my way downstairs, tightly gripping the banister as I slowly take each step one at time. One foot down, next foot down. On my way down I work out the day - when I spoke to my friends May and Brock it was Tuesday and judging by the number of dreams I've had since then... that would make today Friday. One foot down, next foot down, I steadily make my way down to the front door. The big solid door that protects me and my family. I am now faced with a choice - do I slip into the wine-coloured living-room with black furniture where, if my days are right, my mother will be watching her favourite chat show... or do I turn left and go into the yellow kitchen-slash-dining-room where my daughter Skya will be marking term papers and Twila will be out the back training, both of them working side-by-side with their Pokémon.
    How do I choose who will be the best to face after God knows what. How do I decide who will be the easiest to handle. But then, I must consider that if I go into the living-room my daughters will come running and if I go into the kitchen-slash-dining-room then my mother will come running too. The choice then becomes simple.

    "Mommy?" I moan quietly as I stagger into the living-room.

    "Dawn," my mother shoots out of her seat and rushes towards me
    .
    I hear the clatter of books and I am not surprised by who reaches me first - she stands tall by my side, her large oily fins cradling me, her gentle red eyes look at me over her head-crest and she speaks my name in the way she always does ever since I got her on the day of my tenth birthday.

    "Empoleon," I whisper and hug her.

    She lets me go sharply as my daughters enter the room. I turn round and embrace them both, tears streaming down our faces.

    "Mommy," Twila sobs.

    "It's good to see you up and about," Skya sniffs as she tries to hold her tears.

    "It's alright my babies," I try to sound strong and confident but my voice comes out shaky and weepy.

    After what feels like the most amazing lifetime, we detach ourselves from each other. We all move across the living-room, just by the phone to the second larger leather couch opposite the television. My mother sits first, then me and Twila on the arm, Skya and Empoleon stand across from us, their backs to the deep red walls.

    "How long...?" I look around nervously.

    "A few days," Twila puts a reassuring hand on my shoulder.

    My mother wraps her arms around my waist and nestles into my shoulder, crying. I cradle her head in my arms and whisper to her "it's okay, it's okay."

    "Doctor says it was like you were in a state of NREM Parasomnia," Skya says big words.

    I stare at her blankly, the clueless expression on my face asking, "huh?"

    There is a soft patting sound and my mother's very fat grey cat comes plodding into the living-room. It looks down the stubby little nose on its round chubby head at Empoleon and turns away in disgust, its long straggly whiskers whipping round its crescent-shaped head as it waddles its way back out of the living-room, its fat backside wiggling and jiggling as it goes.

    "In which an individual is caught in the moment between being asleep and being awake," my daughter explains, "although, in your case, it was mixed in with random lapses of consciousness, which is typical in those suffering from Narcolepsy."

    "Overall, though," my other daughter, Twila, interjects, "it's good that you're fully awake and here with us again... we were so worried."

    "I know," I begin to speak.

    I do not notice the immediate change in my surroundings.

    "I promise it won't happen..." my brain clicks on to the change, "again."

    I whirl around, my breathing growing frantic as I begin to panic. I have somehow found my way deep into a forest in God only knows where. The huge sturdy trees surround me and close in, limiting my choice of direction. Every free route is covered in thorny bramble branches or holly leaves and there is no hope. Various parts of my body sting. I inspect myself and find I am covered in many cuts and scrapes, undoubtedly from my journey here... wherever here is...

    "What do you want from me?" I shriek through the trees. "Why have you done this to me?"

    My knees weaken, I feel dizzy and I cannot breathe. I collapse to the ground and begin to cry. I can't think in my head of what could possibly be happening. It's too much information. I see fire. It burns! It licks away at my flesh, eating me alive. I begin to sob and roll onto the ground, screaming in pain and terror. I gaze incoherently at the canopy of Autumn leaves above me, but it is not Autumn - the trees are burning!

    "You do not belong!"

    "No, no, no, no, no, no, NO!" I squeal. "I do belong! I DO!"

    The ground around me begins to crumble in a terrifying earthquake. The trees fall down, crashing all around me, drowning out my screams and yet I cannot stop myself. I pray that my daughters will hear me, that someone will hear me and come running to save me. A large tree collapses, snapping through some of the thorns that previously blocked my path - this is my chance!

    I scramble to my feet, every inch of my body in agony and I throw myself towards the newly created clearing.

    "You are the cause!" that deep voice booms all around me and causes another tree to fall.
    The large hunk of solid wood breaks through the earth and plummets into darkness. My eyes widen at the sight and I claw my way towards the clearing. I can feel the earth behind me falling through, it is try to swallow me!

    I howl into the fiery storm above as I too fall into darkness.

    "And a new being is born," those final words escape my mouth and echo in the infinite void I am in, "... Arceus..."

    ~~~END OF CHAPTER TWO~~~

    Questions, comments, reviews and ratings are all more than welcome ^^
     
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    An-chan

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  • As spooky as ever! You rieally do write well and you can capture the moment, but there's one thing I'd like to complain to you about. I'd really like to know what's going on. There's no rush, but I'm hoping to get a clue to what's going on in the next chapter. Because, frankly, I'm not quite sure I understand what's going on! I liked the way the nightmare repeats the same way time after time, but then, one time, changes. And the present tense, I think, adds some feeling to this.

    Besides, Empoleon rocks \o/ I want more Empoleon! =D
     

    Laterna

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  • Thankies for the comments and questions An-chan *cookies*

    Actually, probably the biggest clue you could get was in that chapter there you just read ^^ Dawn's been having nightmares about Arceus and, at the end of the chapter, it came true. I can't say too much, this fic is all about mystery and not knowing what's going on and you follow the characters as they learn what is going on.

    Sadly enough, this is the last chapter for a good while that will be written in first person for a very simple reason ~ Dawn is no longer there to tell us what's happening (as you were made aware of by the events at the end of chapter two). Every chapter from here on out will be third person. past tense ^^

    Also, one more note ~ I'm going to employ a technique that I've used in a previous fic, in which every seventh chapter (Chapter 7, Chapter 14, Chapter 21, etc) until the end will be "Specials", featuring stories revolving around Dawn's past and reealing more and more of her character and of her daughters.

    Thankies again for the comments An-chan ^^
     

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  • Heyloo you ^^ Another great chapter hunni. I think we all want to know what's going on, it makes us desperate, you know? But for me, that's the sign of a great storyteller and an even better writer. That you can tell a story so much and not leave too many clues so it gets people guessing and wondering and eager to read the next part.

    Just a few mistakes I spotted

    in my heart of heartsmy daughters

    and

    I scrambled to my feet

    a space between hearts and my, also be careful of your tense, I think it should be scramble.

    It was nice to see, or not so ice to see that fat cat XD Purugly, it's like all the glamour has went to it's head, and it still thinks that it's a Glameow.
    Also, question, what was your decision for making Empoleon male, because as far as anyone else knows, Pilpup was female.

    Anyway, can't wait for the next installment, keep it up Laterna.

    xxx
     
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    Oooh, spooky!
    This is great, except for a few minor mistakes here and there. Other than that, it was excellent!

    Can't wait to read more!^^
     

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  • Fabulously written, I love how you write each character! The addition of the Pokémon made it seem much more realistic, and I love the element of mystery and suspense. I am very excited to see the next chapter!
     

    Laterna

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  • Thankies to ArtekOublier, Snowfire and celuthea for your reviews *cookies*

    I think we all want to know what's going on, it makes us desperate, you know? But for me, that's the sign of a great storyteller and an even better writer. That you can tell a story so much and not leave too many clues so it gets people guessing and wondering and eager to read the next part.

    I'm glad that came across. All I read are what my old english lecturer calls "bad books" (pureply plot driven, you read it for the thrill of reading it, it rarely makes you think), which is something I wanted to emulate here ~ I wanted my readers to want to read it above all else and I hope I have achieved that ^^

    I'll get on fixing those mistakes ASAP!

    Argh! Fat cat! *runs* *is so far away in hiding*

    Whoopsies, Empoleon isn't supposed to be male XD it just looks more masculine to me, I did it without even thinking, I will edit that when I go to edit those other mistakes I made... lots of mistakes in this chapter, I'm slipping a bit *looks around nervously*

    I'm glad you enjoyed it Shnowi ^^ hope I see you around for chapter 03.

    "Fabulously written"? *blushes* thankies, from here on out Pokémon will appear more frequently so I'm sure that'll add to the story and make it all the more "fabulous" ^^

    I can only assume that people are oakies with the Special Chapters idea (see my last post before this one, in response to An-Chan's review of chapter 02) seeing since no-one said anything about it :P

    Thankies to you all again, I hope you all stick around *sticky cookies to make you stay* :P
     

    Laterna

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  • Oh my gosh that was wonderful! Can't wait for the next chapter!

    I kinda hate doing this but kinda want to too, you know? As Astinus pointed out in an earlier post, one-line reviews are against the rules so please try not to do it again, oakies?

    Thank you for saying something nice about my fic all the same though, it is appreciated ^^
     

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  • Chapter 03 ~ A Living Nightmare

    Oakies, looking great reviewers ^^ keep it up *cookies*

    As stated in post numero 9, the format switches to third person here as Dawn is no longer present to tell us the story. Keep reading the many chapters to come and this change will be made much clearer ^^

    Enjoy ^^

    Chapter 03 ~ A Living Nightmare


    A rather tall young woman was sitting quite happily in a bright yellow kitchen. She was not terribly aware of her surroundings because that's just the type of person this girl was. She was marking papers - essays specifically, her senior class at the Trainer's School (a class that she invented), they had to write a short essay on the ethics of Pokémon, which includes basic habitat information, food, proper care, etc...

    "It's really basic stuff," she moaned. "how could he get that one wrong? It's not like I'm asking a lot of these people, just the basics..." she begins to second-guess herself, "or am I?"

    There was a noise just outside the door and she suddenly looked up, her very long prussian blue hair flying up as she sharply raised her head.

    "Mommy?" a quiet moaning voice spoke.

    The girl immediately rose to her feet, but before she could really move, a large blue blur whizzed past her, quickly followed by the equally fuzzy image of her sister. As the pair passed, the books and the papers the girl was working with clatter to the floor. The girl moved through to the living-room last, passing the solid burnt sienna door as she did.

    Upon entering the living-room she is greeted by the sight of her mother - a woman shorter than herself, with shoulder length hair, of the same colour as her own, curling around the back of her head... just like her grandmother's used to be...

    Dawn turned around sharply to face her daughters, stepping away slightly from the large dark blue penguin she had been nuzzling in to.

    "Mommy," the girl's sister sobs.

    "It's good to see you up and about," the girl fought back tears as she spoke.

    "It's alright my babies," Dawn turned to her daughters and embraced them, her body shaking as much as her voice.

    A long time passed, but no-one cared - they just wanted to be there with their mother and be comforted in the fact that she was finally well enough to see them. After a little bit longer, dawn unhappily pulled herself away from her daughters and motioned towards the couch on the opposite end of the room. Dawn, the girl's sister and their grandmother all sat down on the black leather sofa, while the girl and the Empoleon stood across from them, their backs to the deep red walls.

    "How long?" Dawn asked, looking around the room into the eyes of everyone.

    "A few days," Twila, the girl's sister, responded.

    Twila stretched out her thin but muscular arm and placed a firm reassuring hand on her mothers shoulder.

    The girls' grandmother - Johanna - wrapped her arms around her daughter (sitting on her left on the couch) and began to sob. Dawn cradled her mother's head in her arms, gently stroking her cheek and whispering, "it's okay, it's okay."

    "Doctor says it was like you were in a state of NREM Parasomnia," the girl finally spoke, she used big words due to her profession as a theory-based teacher.

    Dawn gawked at her and uttered the sound of, "huh?"

    Rather suddenly, a very fat grey cat plodded its way through into the living-room the girls were in, its padded feet making a patting sound on the floor. It scanned the room, looking down its nose at everyone before singling out the large dark penguin. The Purugly then turned its head in disgust, the long straggly whiskers on its nose whipped around its crescent-shaped head as it rotated and waddled away. As it traipsed away, its big fat backside jiggled and wiggled.

    The girl turned back to face her mother, immediately trying to forget that incident.

    "In which an individual is caught in the moment between being asleep and being awake," the girl elucidated, "although, in your case, it was mixed in with random lapses of consciousness, which is typical in those suffering from Narcolepsy."

    "Overall though," the girls sister interjected, ""it's good that you're fully awake and here with us again... we were so worried."

    "I know," Dawn began to speak but fell back in her chair.

    "Mommy!" Twila shrieked and collapsed off her perch on the arm of the couch to hold her mother.

    "Mommy?" she moaned.

    Johanna immediately rose, moving back to allow her granddaughters to make their examinations. She raised her hands to her mouth like she was praying, then lowered them to her chest, then they made their way through her thinning grey hair and then back to cover her mouth.

    The girl bolted forward, dashing onto her knees and bending over her mother - listening to her heartbeat, checking her pulse, shaking her, trying to wake her.

    "Mommy?" Twila began to sob.

    "Call the doctor," the girl commanded her sister.

    Twila did not respond, she continued to shake their mother and scream and sob, "Mommy? Mommy? MOMMY?!"

    The girl snatched Twila's arm, gripping her tightly as she spoke through her teeth, "get on that phone and get the damn doctor here NOW!"

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    The girl held the green receiver of the phone in her right hand as she waited for her call to get through all the electrical traffic. Her face was cold with sick and sweat, her eyes were filled with determination as she willed the call to come through.

    "Professor Lucas Lux here, how can I help?" a strong masculine voice that was not very deep was heard through the receiver.

    His picture then appeared on-screen - he had short spiky Prussian blue hair and was wearing a black shirt hidden under a white lab-coat.

    "Daddy?" the girl smiled as she saw his face.

    "Skya, my angel, is everything all right? You look terrible!" Lucas gasped upon seeing his daughter's pasty face.

    "Daddy?" Skya's voice quivered as she broke down in tears.

    Her father stared in silence, his deep blue eyes reflecting the pain in his heart - he never knew how to react in these kinds of situations, he never was around much when the girls were growing up and was more used to dealing with them on a more mature and professional level.

    "I'm sorry," Skya sniffed as she wiped her eyes and her nose on her hands. "I shouldn't have..."

    "It's alright," Lucas cut her off and smiled. "What's up my angel?"

    "It's mother, she's taken ill again," Skya explained. "She just collapsed and we don't know what to do, the doctor says there's nothing really he can do and," she broke off in tears again.

    Lucas could not bear the sounds of her sobs. He felt like he was watching her die and there was nothing he could do to help her. But, then...

    "Gardevoir," Lucas blurted out.

    Skya snapped out of the thoughts of her mother's condition and looked up at her father, her eyes heavy and red.

    "What about her?" Skya ask in a low voice, almost angry at the suggestion as she knew fine what he was thinking for she had already considered it on some level.

    "Her hypnosis abilities, her unique attribute to read and share in the feelings of others..." he paused for a moment to allow the idea to sink in and then continued in a softer tone, "Gardevoir may be able to share it with her, split the pain and take some of the burden off your mother."

    "No," Skya rose and moved away from the screen, talking over her father. "I don't want to hear it."

    "Possibly even soothe her," Lucas's voice grew more desperate. "Please, angel, please just listen."

    "NO!" Skya shouted as she slammed her hands down on the table the phone was perched on. "Gardevoir is... Gardevoir..." her voice shook violently as she held back tears of rage and sorrow. "While I love my mother more than anything, that Gardevoir is like my child - I raised her from an egg and we have been together for eight years. There is no way I am going to endanger her..." she sat back down on the leather chair in front of the desk and spoke sensitively. "Mom wouldn't want it, especially not after..." she trailed off.

    Both Lucas and Skya knew exactly what she was speaking of - Skya and Twila both had to sacrifice their lives as trainers to help take care of their Grandmother Johanna and, while they did not mind it nor would they change that decision, they knew that it was something their mother always regretted on some level.

    "I'm sorry," Lucas looked down at his feet. "I shouldn't have... we'll talk later, angel, I love you," he looked deep into her eyes, "you, your sister, Johanna and Dawn, my peppermint sweetie..." his eyes filled with tears. "We'll speak soon, I love you, goodbye."

    "Bye dad," Skya sighed, feeling horrendously guilty.

    The image of her father's clear and chiselled face was sucked into a white dot at the centre of the blank screen as the phones disconnected. Skya hung up her receiver, rose from the chair and gazed around the room. It was a wine red and while it always reminded her mother of good times out with "the girls", it always reminded Skya of blood. She reminisced on a discussion she had with her mother regarding the colour of the walls, which took place around six or seven years ago...

    "Mommy," Skya, young and fresh-faced even after a hard day, asked her mother in the most serious voice you'd ever hear. "Why did you paint the walls red?"

    "It's wine-red, actually," Dawn smiled. "It reminds me of all those good times when I was young, just a little older than you, nights out in Veilstone City, just the girls and... well, the rest you'll hear when you're a little older," she giggled and went back to the newspaper she was reading.

    Skya stared at her mother, sitting on the black leather sofa, reading the newspaper.

    "I hate it," she said venomously. "I think it's disgusting."

    Dawn immediately dropped her paper, it crumpled on the floor, pages falling out all over. She moved very quickly over to her daughter and wrapped her arms around her.

    "It's alright, it's alright," she spoke in a soft, soothing voice. "Talk to me, tell me why you hate it," Dawn smiled as she pulled away from her daughter.

    "It looks like blood," Skya said bluntly. "It looks like you killed someone and then had that crazy purple monkey smear it all over the walls, rubbing it in to every bloody inch of our life!"

    "Hey!" Dawn snapped. "Don't talk to me like that young lady, you know better."

    Skya sighed heavily and crossed her arms over her chest, pouting and glaring at the wall across from her mother.

    "I don't speak to you like that so you don't speak to me like that, alright?" Dawn spoke calmly, trying to clear the air.

    Skya sighed again, her face clearly showing that her mood was lifting slightly as she knew she couldn't argue against that.

    "Consider," Dawn spoke matter-of-factly, "if it's blood, it's the blood of our family that's in these walls... it's you, it's me, your sister, Grandma and even your father and all of our Pokémon... this house is us, the blood you see on these walls is us, it represents our unbreakable bond as a family and nothing will ever wash it away..."

    "I promise," Skya whispered to herself, her voice low and yet filled with strength, "I will find out what is wrong with you and I will fix it."

    Upon saying that, Skya walked out of the bloody living-room, passing by the solid red door and made her way up the stairs. Her mind was focused solely on making it up these stairs, then going into her mother's room and making sure she was alright. One foot up, next foot up. Skya thought of all the things the doctor had said about their mother's condition and all the possible ways of dealing with it, even the outrageous ones, she still considered them a viable option if nothing else could be done. One foot up, next foot up. If it wasn't enough, if mother never came out of this state, then Skya would become head of the family, a natural choice is she is the most mature and responsible. One foot up, next foot up. Father, of course, would have to move back in - he and Dawn separated due to his unwillingness to leave his lab, but Skya knew that she was there for him in various ways over the years - she knew that he'd come back to help out. One foot up, next foot up. Johanna would continue to receive round-the-clock care, even if it meant Skya giving up her job at the Trainer's School. In that instance, Twila would either pick up the slack or she would be finally be allowed to travel the world as she's always dreams of, wherein father would pick up the slack. One foot up, next foot up. Skya was now at the top of the stairs, looking up and down the cream corridor she gazed at her mother's room door, just a few short steps away.

    Skya moved closer towards the green door, reaching out for its handle. Her head was empty, her heart was pounding. She gripped the silvery handle tightly and twisted it and pushed, causing the door to swing open into the room to reveal her mother... gone?

    ~~~END OF CHAPTER THREE~~~

    Oooh... spookeh or what? Please remember to review apropriately (ie, no more one-liners, don't won't mods killing my readers lol) and feel free to rate this thread through use of them shiny stars at the top ^^ questions, speculations and suggestions are also more than welcome so feel free to comment and give your opinions ~ I'm very open to the ideas of others *cookies*
     

    An-chan

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  • Hmm, ideas of others, you say? I'd suggest you make a spinoff with only Empoleon, Lucas and Dawn! or what the heck, who need Dawn?
    Lucaaaas ~~~~
    Empoleooon ~~~~
    I love fortuneshipping! :chu:

    But, to stay on topic, which of course is reviewing this fic:
    I'm not going to note any spelling etc. mistakes, because I don't mind them, I don't notice them and I'm not a native English speaker so let's leave that part to others.
    This is interesting. Not quite as spooky as it was, but still as interesting. I have no complaints apart from these two:
    1) Why does Skye protect her Pokémon when her mother is, apparently, dying? I understand she wants to keep her Gardevoir from encountering any harm, but gee, there's got to be a limit! Besides, I've understood that Gardevoir expecially like to help people. She'd get damaged in a fight, too, and nobody would get any serious benefit! Either Skye is really childish or she just can't think straight with so much stress on her.
    2) This is not a real complaint, I'm just annoyed by the way Lucas keeps adressing Skye as "his angel" or "angel" and telling her he loves her. it might even be the way a far-away dad behaves, but it irritates me a considerable amount. Moreover,Lucas, come back home! Lucaaaas~~ :cheeky:

    I'm sorry to point out only negative things, but I think that's the only way to help people to get better. The only thing "omg this is awesome"-review has an effect on is self-esteem! :laugh:
    Because other than those, this is a great fic. An-chan over and out!

    // Edit: This goes for ArtekOublier's post below this post. About those commas: I don't think either of them should be removed, I think the sentence is perfect the way it is. I would write it just as Laterna did. Then again, I'm not a native English writer *laughs* Anyway, in my opinion the sentence should be left like it is.
     
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  • Another great chapter, you never cease to amaze mi bibi ^^
    Another few mistakes *sighs*

    "A few days," Twila, the girl's sister, responded.

    To me this part doesn't need the other comma, it breaks up the sentence and it's not needed. Also in the 1st part there are some sense problems,try reading through it again, try and stick to past tense all the way through if that's how you're starting.

    Nice to see this chapter as a mirror of the last actually, portrailing what happened almost without Dawn's exerience. You did it really well too.
    Horrible to see Purulgy as usual.
    Also good to see Lucas, can imagine what he looks like. ^^ Bet you can too.

    So what will the girls do now that there mother has gone? Who's gonna take over the school if they leave? Joahnna won't be fit enough for it.

    Teachers at that age....sheesh, they must really be clever. How did the girls come up with the idea for the school? I think maybe alot of trainers were stumbling in the ways of being a trainer and they came up with an idea for those that needed help. Anyone else got any other views?

    I also loved the stairs thing at the end, building up tension as you go ^^

    Keep going bibi, can't wait for chapter 4 ^^
     
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    Wow, this is even spookier then the last one!

    I liked this chapter, it was great!

    As ArtekOublier stated, try to stick to past tense all the way through. It will make more sense that way^^

    I love how you built up tension at the end, it makes it very dramatic! It also gives it an air of mystery^^

    This was great, can't wait to read more!
     

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  • What a haunting ending! I like how you've changed the prospective, and I really want one of their phones! What a nifty thing to have!

    There were so few mistakes, spelling or otherwise, and tenses were all brilliant and the story moved at a great pace. Brilliant, and more please!
     
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