JX Valentine
Your aquatic overlord
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Well, now, see, that's the thing. It wouldn't be Chinese water torture if you liked something about it.
So, on that note, you're getting Johto. And we're skipping the episodes with Harrison.
I was actually thinking of the Johto League Champions theme. XD Wasn't that the one that went "Born to be a winner, born to be a champion, born to be a winner, born to be the very best. Pokemon JOHTO"?
That's okay. You have me. =D
The Battle Frontier theme song begs to differ. =P
But really, the original's the best, I think. If only because it's so much easier to make fun of it than most of the other opening themes. (Although it's a hell of a lot easier to make fun of the Battle Frontier's ending theme than anything else, I think.)
For serials, yes. For one-shots, not really.
Fortunately, no. The reason why is because I go through so many different changes to the parts before it before I finally hit the ending.
For example, the original Midsummer Knights ending was planned to have Viola die. The one after that had her suddenly revealed to be a cyborg. (WTF.) The one after that left her fate ambiguous.
Thankfully, multiple changes are leading the ending away from all three options.
Although I still think the cyborg one would've been hilarious.
A bit, yes. If executed decently, the ending doesn't really. It's just a cap on a fic I've decided is already good or otherwise decent. It might shock me and make me like the fic more, but generally, by then, I'm already into the fic as it is.
If it's a soggy ending (a la Lady In the Water), then I'm probably naturally going to feel as if the story's incomplete, which might rub me the wrong way.
Note the bold punctuation marks. Remember that a period, exclamation point, or question mark (preferably a period in anything that's not dialogue or a question) goes at the end of every sentence. Those are your closing punctuation marks, so you really can't ignore them.
Also, in dialogue, if you're writing a sentence (that wouldn't normally end in a question mark or exclamation point) in quotes that's attached to a dialogue tag, you punctuate it with a comma.
It's a bit confusing, but if you need a better explanation and set of examples, use OWL at Purdue. In fact, you can go directly to their page about dialogue.
Also, you may want to be aware that repeating the word "voice" at the end of three different dialogue tags (or the pieces that tell us who's speaking) will actually sound a little dry to us. We're more likely to be turned off by that kind of writing because there's really nothing interesting here. You don't use word variation, and you really don't describe the voices other than one's menacing and one's screaming. Try identifying the speakers – like using the word "man" or "woman," for example.
You can't hear light.
Also, I put a comma at the end of this because it leads into another sentence that's connected to this one by the conjunction "and." In other words, it's a compound sentence.
Try this whenever you're writing a conjunction (and, but, or, nor, for, yet, so): Cover up part of the sentence (up to and including the word "and") and read the rest aloud. Then, move your hand so that the other half (and the word "and") is covered and read the first part aloud. If both make sense as their own sentences, you have a compound, so you need to punctuate it with a comma in the middle.
You may want to rearrange this sentence. As it stands, you're right now stating that the blue, spiky hair is in its twenties.
Now, you may be wondering why I told you to put a period here and not in the other pieces of dialogue. The reason why is because the part about the man smiling isn't actually a dialogue tag. It's not really a "he said" phrase that's connected to the quote so that it can't stand on its own. It just is its own sentence, so you need to punctuate it as such.
1. Tip: Read whatever you write aloud. If it sounds awkward, chances are, you need to change it.
2. Try the trick I told you earlier (the one to figure out whether or not something is a compound sentence) with any sentence in which you use a comma. If both sides can be their own sentences, then chances are, you have a run-on and need to split them apart.
3. You may want to rearrange this sentence anyway. While it's technically correct, the part about the legs is in a confusing sentence with three different groups that the word "their" could refer to. You run at a risk of implying that either it's the Pokémon's legs or the two men's legs.
4. You may want to describe the Pokémon as well. Basically, we can't see into your head, so you'll need to supply us with as much detail as possible so we can get a clear mental image of what you're trying to convey. I realize you mention their species later, but you really should do it as soon as you mention them.
Don't use numerals (1, 2, et cetera) for any number from zero to ninety-nine unless you're talking about dates or addresses. Just write them out.
Either "had just awoken" or "just awoke." "Awoken" can't stand on its own.
So, yeah, generally, go to OWL at Purdue and check out their worksheets. You should be able to figure things out for yourself by looking through there because they're fairly clear.
